Point of view is the position from which a story is told. It determines who is speaking, what the reader can know, how close the reader feels to the characters, and how information is revealed.

The three main points of view are first person, second person and third person.


1. First Person Point of View

First person uses words such as:

I, me, my, mine, we, us, our

The narrator is inside the story and tells the reader what they personally see, think, feel and experience.

Example

I opened the door slowly. My hands were trembling. I had waited ten years for this moment, but now that it had arrived, I wanted to run away.

The reader experiences the event through the narrator.

Another example

I could hear Mama calling from the kitchen, but I pretended not to hear her. I knew exactly why she wanted me.

First person is useful when:

  • you want a personal and intimate story;
  • the main character has a strong voice;
  • you want readers to experience events directly through one person;
  • the narrator’s thoughts and emotions are important.

First person has limits

The narrator can only know what they reasonably know.

Incorrect:

I walked into the room. Across town, James was secretly packing his suitcase and wondering whether I would forgive him.

If the narrator is not with James, how does she know what he is thinking?

Better:

I walked into the room. I did not know it then, but James was already preparing to leave.

Or reveal the information later:

Three days later, James told me that while I was waiting for him, he had been packing his suitcase.

2. Second Person Point of View

Second person uses:

you, your, yours

The narrator speaks directly to the reader as though the reader is participating in the experience.

Example

You step into the dark room and immediately notice the silence. You reach for the light switch, but nothing happens.

Another example

You know you should walk away, but something keeps you standing at the gate.

Second person is less common in novels but can be very effective in:

  • reflective writing;
  • interactive stories;
  • instructional writing;
  • devotionals;
  • short creative passages;
  • sections designed to place the reader inside an experience.

Example in reflective Christian writing

You may have prayed for years and wondered whether God had heard you. Then one ordinary morning, the answer arrives in a way you never expected.

Be careful with second person

Do not tell readers what they definitely think or feel unless the context supports it.

Too forceful:

You hate your father because he abandoned you.

Better:

You may still carry pain from the day your father left.

The second version leaves room for different reader experiences.

3. Third Person Point of View

Third person uses:

he, she, him, her, they, them, his, hers, their

The narrator stands outside the story and tells us about the characters.

Example

Miriam opened the door slowly. Her hands were trembling. She had waited ten years for this moment.

Third person can be written in several ways.

4. Third Person Limited

In third person limited, the narrator follows one character closely.

The reader knows that character’s thoughts and feelings but does not automatically know everyone else’s.

Example

Miriam watched Daniel enter the room. He smiled, but she could not tell whether he was happy to see her. Her stomach tightened.

We know Miriam’s thoughts.

We do not know Daniel’s.

Wrong:

Miriam watched Daniel enter the room. Her stomach tightened. Daniel secretly wished he had never come.

The narration has suddenly jumped into Daniel’s mind.

Better:

Miriam watched Daniel enter the room. Her stomach tightened. He avoided her eyes, and she wondered whether he regretted coming.

Now everything remains within Miriam’s experience.

5. Third Person Omniscient

Omniscient means all-knowing.

The narrator can know what several characters think, feel and experience.

Example

Miriam wanted Daniel to stay, although she was too proud to tell him. Daniel, meanwhile, was convinced that Miriam wanted him gone. Neither realised how badly they had misunderstood the other.

The narrator knows both characters’ thoughts.

This can work well, but beginner writers should use it carefully.

Without control, it can become confusing.

Watch Out for Head-Hopping

Head-hopping happens when the writer jumps from one character’s thoughts to another’s too quickly without a clear reason.

Example:

Peter looked at Grace and wondered whether she still loved him. Grace thought he looked tired. Peter hoped she would say something. Grace wished he would leave.

The reader is being pushed back and forth between two minds.

A clearer version from Peter’s point of view:

Peter looked at Grace and wondered whether she still loved him. She studied his face for a moment but said nothing. He wished he knew what she was thinking.

Or from Grace’s point of view:

Grace looked at Peter. He seemed tired. She wondered whether he had come to apologise, but she was not ready to hear him.

Point of View Is Not the Same as Tense

Writers sometimes confuse point of view with tense.

Point of view answers:

Who is telling the story?

Tense answers:

When is the action being described?

You can write first person in past tense:

I walked into the room.

Or first person in present tense:

I walk into the room.

Third person past:

Ruth walked into the room.

Third person present:

Ruth walks into the room.

Maintain Point-of-View Consistency

Once you choose a point of view, do not accidentally switch.

Inconsistent

I walked towards the market. Sarah was waiting near the gate. You could immediately tell that something was wrong. She wondered whether I had discovered the truth.

This moves from:

Iyou → Sarah’s thoughts.

Consistent first person

I walked towards the market. Sarah was waiting near the gate. I could immediately tell that something was wrong. I wondered what she was hiding.

Consistent third person

Daniel walked towards the market. Sarah was waiting near the gate. He could immediately tell that something was wrong. He wondered what she was hiding.

Narrative Distance: How Close Is the Reader?

Point of view also affects narrative distance.

Narrative distance simply means how close the reader feels to the character’s experience.

Distant

Mary was very disappointed when she received the letter.

We understand what happened, but we are standing some distance away.

Closer

Mary read the letter twice. Her name was there, followed by the words she had feared: We regret to inform you…

We are experiencing the moment with her.

Very close

No. She read the sentence again. They could not have rejected her. Not after everything she had done.

Now the narration is almost inside Mary’s thoughts.

All three can be correct. Choose the distance that suits the moment.

Important emotional scenes often benefit from closer narration.

Compare the Same Scene in Three Points of View

First person

I saw the envelope on the table and immediately recognised the university logo. My fingers shook as I opened it.

Second person

You see the envelope on the table and recognise the university logo. Your fingers shake as you reach for it.

Third person

Esther saw the envelope on the table and immediately recognised the university logo. Her fingers shook as she opened it.

The event is the same.

The reader’s position changes.

Which Point of View Should You Choose?

Ask yourself five questions.

1. Whose story is this?

If the book is deeply centred on one person’s experience, first person or third person limited may work well.

2. How close should the reader feel?

For intimacy:

I could not breathe.

or:

Esther could not breathe.

For greater distance:

Esther struggled to control her emotions.

3. How much information does the reader need?

If readers need access to several characters’ thoughts, third person omniscient or carefully separated multiple viewpoints may work.

4. Does the character have a distinctive voice?

If yes, first person can be powerful.

Example:

I knew Mama was angry before I even entered the compound. The silence told me everything.

5. What best serves the story?

Do not choose first person simply because it feels easier.

Do not choose third person because it sounds more literary.

Choose the perspective that best communicates the story.

Using Multiple Point-of-View Characters

A novel can have more than one viewpoint character.

For example:

Chapter One: Miriam

Miriam watched the bus disappear around the corner.

Chapter Two: Daniel

Daniel did not look back as the bus left Nairobi.

This can work very well if the transitions are clear.

A useful beginner rule is:

One main viewpoint per scene or chapter.

Do not change viewpoint in the middle of a paragraph simply because you want to tell the reader what another character is thinking.

Showing Thoughts Correctly

First person

I wondered whether he was telling the truth.

Or more directly:

He was lying. I knew it.

Third person limited

Ruth wondered whether he was telling the truth.

Or closer:

He was lying. Ruth knew it.

Second person

You wonder whether he is telling the truth.

 

A Quick Pronoun Test

If you are unsure what point of view you are using, check the pronouns.

First person

I entered the church. I looked around for my sister.

Second person

You enter the church. You look around for your sister.

Third person

Lydia entered the church. She looked around for her sister.

Common Beginner Mistakes

1. Accidental switching

I entered the house. You could smell smoke everywhere.

Better:

I entered the house. I could smell smoke everywhere.

2. Revealing information the viewpoint character cannot know

Hannah smiled at John. John secretly hated her.

If we are in Hannah’s limited perspective, write:

Hannah smiled at John. He gave her a stiff nod, and she wondered whether she had offended him.

3. Explaining every emotion

Instead of:

David was angry.

Try:

David pushed the chair backwards and walked out without saying goodbye.

4. Choosing a viewpoint but ignoring its limitations

Every point of view gives you something and takes something away.

First person gives intimacy but limits knowledge.

Third person limited gives intimacy with slightly more flexibility.

Omniscient gives broad knowledge but requires greater control.

Second person creates immediacy but can become tiring if used poorly.

Simple Beginner Exercise

Write the same short event three times:

Situation: A woman discovers that she has received a scholarship.

First person

I stared at the email for several seconds. Then I screamed. After three unsuccessful applications, I had finally received the scholarship.

Second person

You open the email expecting another rejection. Instead, the first word you see is Congratulations.

Third person

Naomi opened the email expecting another rejection. When she saw the word Congratulations, she covered her mouth with both hands.

Now ask:

  • Which version feels most personal?
  • Which gives you the storytelling freedom you need?
  • Which sounds most natural for your story?

Final Principle

Point of view is not merely about choosing between “I”, “you” and “she”. It determines what the reader can see, know, feel and experience.

Choose the perspective that best serves your story, establish it clearly, remain consistent, and only change viewpoint deliberately.

When in doubt, especially as a beginner, choose one main viewpoint character per scene and tell only what that character can reasonably see, know, remember, think or feel.

Training by: Dr. Muthoni Mercy Omukhango

Dr. Muthoni Mercy Omukhango is a Christian publisher, author, trainer, and marketplace minister. She serves as National Director of CLC Kenya, Authors’ Manager at the African Christian Authors Book Award (ACABA), Convener of Mama Africa Book Box, and Patron of CLC Kids and Teens.

Through the Publishing in Africa Series, she equips authors, publishers, and literary entrepreneurs with practical strategies for developing, publishing, distributing, and growing African-authored literature.

Her ministry is centred on advancing God’s Kingdom through literature and helping more African voices to be written, published, distributed, and read.

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